Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities What are the reasons? Do advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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Now days it is seen that most of the villagers are moving to cities for higher studies or for a job. In
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essay I will weigh both the sides of the topic and analyse which side is stronger.
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, most of the villages are not properly developed, one can get the basic education, but if someone wants to complete higher education they have to move to cities.
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, the
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of education which is provided is not at par with what they get in urban areas.
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, the job opportunities are very less and the available jobs are mostly agricultural. If someone wants to
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on other areas like IT domain, research, etc.; it is only possible in metro cities.
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, the
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system, it is far better in developed parts than in developing villages, the best doctors, medicine to cure the disease are easily available in urban parts rather than rural areas which
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makes the city an important place for youths to leave. Moving to the positive aspect of staying in rural areas. Is doing an agricultural job considered to be low
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? Many young people believe that, but I don't think so, it is low
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. As most of the revenue India generates is from agricultural products, staying back in the village can help young blood to be
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where most of their parents
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and in turn will help in increasing GDP.
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, the
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of pollution in cities is very high as compare to villages, so youth can live in village to avoid its
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pollution) ill effects. After comparing both the stakes, I strongly think the advantages of the city are on the heavier side, because of which youths are drifting towards the urban part. I think government should take steps to improve rural areas so that both the places are equally developed and youngs don't have to travel much.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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