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The advent of the internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Write an essay looking at the advantages and disadvantages of this professional arrangement. Share personal examples in your essay.

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The
internet
 has invaded the modern world,
however it
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however, it
 becomes an essential service. People can access
internet
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the internet
 through their smart phone, laptops, smart watches and the cameras,
although
 they are in the forest. According to my view, now people can't live without the
internet
, because all of their works are linked through the
internet
.
This
 essay will analyse the advantages and the disadvantages that dealing with workers and the
internet
. Following
this
 look, a reasoned conclusion will be shared. The online sites and the blogs have been created for human to earn money,
such
 as YouTube,
Fiverr
a rise in the temperature of the body; frequently a symptom of infection
fever
fibre
 and so on,
moreover there
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moreover, there
 are lots of websites for online shopping
such
 as E-bay and Amazon.
As a result
 of
this
people
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person
 can earn money as well as shopping through the
internet
. Do you know? Some employees can work
to
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in
 their workplace through their official site.
Firstly
, I would like to talk what cons are generated from
this
 arrangement. People like to earn money without hard working
therefore
 they have
internet
, But they don't know the bad side of
this
. Someone used to do their job through the online, definitely they don't want to move their body hear and there,
however
 they always look at the computer screen.
As a result
 of
this
 lots of health issues can be generated. Instance for cholesterol and muscle cramps.
Secondly
, we move to
talk
carry out
take
 the advantages. We know how our life is going on. I think it is very busy, perhaps time is very valuable for us. The online network systems make our works more easy. It helps us to save our time.
This
 is the main advantage that we get from the
internet
 as my view. In brief, The
internet
 control all of things throughout the world,
hence
 we should adopt with it while reducing disadvantages of
this
.
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