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All cars that burns fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #burns #fuels
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In the recent years, Replacement of electric cars with fossil
fuel
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 cars have been at the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of global debate. In my opinion, it is beneficial to human and
environment safty
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environment, safety
environment safety
 the to be used electric cars, but it should be considered that to what extent using
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this vehicles
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this vehicle
these vehicles
 is operational.
Firstly
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, there is not enough oil, petrol and
gass
the state of matter distinguished from the solid and liquid states by: relatively low density and viscosity; relatively great expansion and contraction with changes in pressure and temperature; the ability to diffuse readily; and the spontaneous tendency to become distributed uniformly throughout any container
gas
gals
gases
 to meet the future demands. Absolutely human will endanger the
next
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 generation by using Fossil reserves excessively. Because, it will take
thousands year
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a thousand years
thousands years
thousand years
thousand year
 for these reserves to reproduce again.
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, consuming fossil
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fuel led
heated, driven, or produced by burning fuel
fuelled
 to air pollution and because of that the ozone layer may be at irreparable risk. Global warming
also
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 stem from the excessive use of fossil
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fuel which
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fuel, which
 can very harmful
for
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to
humans
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human
 life in
future
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the future
. These
type
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types
 of fuels are classified as irreversible fuels so it is reasonable to find an alternative for that.
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, it seems non operational to use electric cars in every
countries
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country
 or cities. Because it requires advance instruments and many electric charge stations in most cities. Opponent
believe
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believes
 that, electric cars do not have enough speed and power as much as fossil
fuel
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 cars and those need more improvement.
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, those electric cars which can compete with fossil
fuel
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 cars in terms of power or speed ability are more expensive.
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, a typical car can
refueling
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refuel
refuelling
 in less than 1 minutes, though the electric car at least need 20 minutes to recharge. In conclusion,
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 electric cars have many
disadvantage
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disadvantages
 for now, but it is necessary for
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next generation
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the next generation
 to be used electric cars. I personally tend to agree with electric
cars but
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cars, but
 those require many
improvement
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improvements
 in order to become operational.
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