Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own family in order to avoid paying maternity leave later on. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals hold the opinion that it should avoid hiring young females who have not had babies due to avoiding the cost of maternity leave future. I disagree with
this
point because
firstly
, it breaks the basic rule of human right and
secondly
, it would cause negative effects on
whole state's economy
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the whole state's economy
.
This
way
is opposite with the basic moral. From the perspective of human right, there are totally different between individuals on the aspect of
physically
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physics
, but their personalities are equal, and they should be treated as the same
way
in the labour market.
In other words
, different with knowledge or experience, age and gender cannot be changed by any oneself, which is unfair to these young women.
For example
, many
capticalists
of or relating to capitalism or capitalists
capitalists
would like to ask females question
that are
Accept comma addition
that, are
you single, in
relationship
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a relationship
relationships
or married when they hire a young woman in Taiwan, in order to estimate the probability of paying maternity leave in
next few years
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the next few years
, which leads to many females under the huge stress and even influence their personal life in the period of finding
job
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jobs
.
In addition
,
this
way
could bring
the greater
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the greatest
economic issue potentially. Some people might argue that minimize the cost of
company
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the company
is necessary for an employer.
However
, from the view of the whole country, if every
company's
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company
owner does
such
thing, almost females will be very hard to find a job. In
this
case, the rate of unemployment will be high
significantly
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significant
signing
significance
, the
finacial
involving financial matters
financial
burden of social welfare will be serious. That will be a disaster for a nation.
For instance
, after
finacial crisis
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the financial crisis
financial crisis
of 2008, many employers no more hire the
females
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female
employees and even fire a lot of women, which did not cure the economic problem of Japan and made the low increasing rate to be maintained until now. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the
way
of avoiding recruiting young females who do not have family, because
this
will violate the human rights and impact the economy from the macro-perspective.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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