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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

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Introduction
Fast
food
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 joints had a massive expansion in recent years.
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, in a few nations, a huge amount of humans has encountered physical fitness issues by consuming more of
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. Should higher authorities levy more taxes on
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 types of eating items? I completely disagree that governments should tax
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 kind of eatables. The below paragraphs will discuss how it will impact only a certain income group and
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, it will discuss other alternative to reduce intake of
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 eating stuff.
Body paragraph 1
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 with, increasing tariffs will not affect individuals who belong to the upper class and can afford
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 edible items.
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, a difference might be seen in lower and middle class people who consume junk
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. That means increasing the tax on
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food
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 will have only a marginal effect on its consumption.
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, the average income category of people might not take their families to fast
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 restaurants.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, the government should think of creating awareness about the ill-effects of
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 kind of
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. If people are educated about the harmful effects of consuming
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 variety of
food
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 frequently, there is a bright possibility of them adopting a healthier lifestyle.
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, many individuals follow what is shown in advertisements and broadcasting videos of fitness problems caused by eating fast
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 will surely direct them towards a balanced diet.
Conclusion
To conclude, government increasing taxes on junk
food
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 will affect only a selected group of individuals. While, raising awareness of health concerns, will keep a lasting impression on an individual’s mind.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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