In order to improve a contry's education system youg students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during class time. What is your opinion? What are some other ways education system could be improved?

Education
is backbone for
particular country
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particular countries
a particular country
the particular country
. Many people
says
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say
have said
that to improve quality of
education
and
student
should be
give
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given
rights to point out their
faculty
during
lecturers
a speech that is open to the public
lectures
. I will give my personal opinion on that idea and as well as will try to give some technique to
imrove
to make better
improve
. It is wrong, The
student
are torching their teachers while running lectures because of the
faculty
feel that they going improper way and their idea is irrelevant. So that they feel why I give right thought to those students.
Firstly
, teachers
are
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is
most improtant
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more important
most important
for
next generation
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the next generation
and those are one the vital man in society
,
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,
they make
society even
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society, even
if they want
destroy
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to destroy
the nation as well.
Secondly
,
student
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students
the student
should follow instruction properly and establish peace during
lactures
a speech that is open to the public
lectures
lecturers
and give more respect. So that,
faculty
can full of concentration on
particular topic
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a particular topic
and give
relevant idea
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a relevant idea
relevant ideas
the relevant idea
of those
content
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contents
.
Moreover
,
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
indeed
believe
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believes
that teachers are as Jupiter of students so we give respect and obey their instructions.
On the other hand
, some people say that
education system
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the education system
is not proper. The Government should improve quality of
education
.
Firstly
,
education system
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the education system
should be uniform
education
in all over the nation. So that all the
student
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students
can get proper knowledge.
Secondly
, they should strict eye on
education
model and hire
telented
endowed with talent or talents
talented
teachers and well qualified staff and increase the salary of faculties.
Also they
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Also, they
provide free
education
till graduate so that all the students can get
chance
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a chance
the chance
to study. I opine that,
student
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students
a student
the student
should not torturing of their
faculty
during class time and government should improve
education system
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the education system
and provide relevant facility to students and even faculties.

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