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Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive. Others, however say that cooperation teamwork skill is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Some people believe that competitive attitude in children should be facilitated, while others are claiming that teaching them how to co-operate with peers would make them good human being. In my opinion, it is better to teach our children how to treat others rightly.
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, braising a younger competitive generation will develop the society.
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, competitive attitude will enhance your performance intellectually and teach children how to be more competitive without harming others. Nowadays, competent scholars have, the more opportunities.
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, in modern times the people will get jobs only if they are well competent enough.
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, raising children with the cooperation and giving a hand to needy ones is more crucial. Society is not a platform for a single person. Every individuals contribution and participation make the society a better place. With the help of others, we can make complex things into simpler forms.
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 more,
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 make things easier and effective. In conclusion, we should teach the children, how to become successful in their lives and
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 make them good adults by teaching the value of helping others. So I would prefer to become more competitive and the cooperative child. Only the combination of these two makes them to reach on victory.
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