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Many people believe that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on society and individual to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In Morden era, the
use
 of social media
is quite increase
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has quite increased
. Many
person
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people
persons
 think that that
kind
 of sites
have
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has
 a plenty of negative effect on society and
individual
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the individual
individuals
. There have many advantages and disadvantages which are discussed as below.
First
 of all, people do not
use
 of
internet
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the internet
 for their professional
use but
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use, but
 they west ample amount of time on social media like Facebook
,
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,
Instagram
,
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,
Whatsapp and Twitter.
Secondly
, that
kind
 of media is totally
west
any materials unused and rejected as worthless or unwanted
waste
 of time and energy and
that is
also
diversify
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diversifying
 the human mind
,
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,
so that social media users forget about their set goal which is important
for
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in
to
 their life. Nowadays, most of students
are
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are using
are used
use
mobile phone
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a mobile phone
 and they
use
 social sites which
are ruined
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are ruining
ruin
 their future career.
Furthermore
, Using that
kind
 of sites and applications through the mobile and wireless medium which are release ultraviolet rays
that is
 affected human brain cell event body. In revolutionary era, that
kind
 of social media spread rumours like some persons post
surat
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Surat
 found 20 corona virus patient and after that read the users feel panic.
Moreover
, that sites through
increase misuse
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the increase misuse
 of personal information and photographs, so that people get
black mailed
extortion of money by threats to divulge discrediting information
blackmailed
 and many panicked person commit suicide. Many social sites users having
phobia
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a phobia
 for social media and in
last
 frankly social media scattered human life and even their nature. In conclusion, people should less
use
 of social media and stay far from that
kind
 of sites. Government should some restricted
on
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to
 the
use
 of that
sites
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site
.

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