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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In these days publicity is being inappropriate to the public. And there are people believing
this
 advertise and spending their money on a false information. I fully agree and In
this
 essay I'm going to write my opinion in
this
 matter.
Firstly
, The main reason of advertisement is to make people know about your identity or the product that you are selling. Even if it was in a wrong way, or by tricking peoples minds. The point is to be popular and to raise your profit.
For example
, Many companies now is using social media influences and paying them a huge amount of money to oversell their products by getting customers for them. Even if the influence gives the customers misleading information which can harm their health. Sometimes, there are humans buying the product and telling their closest friend and family about it but it's actually contains unlicensed ingredient. To illustrate, There has been a breaking news on the BBC telling about a woman lost a lot of hair just because she bought a shampoo which was promoted to her by an influential.
Secondly
, some of advertiser is targeting young people.
For instance
, Burger king attracts children with the toys that come with the meal.
Moreover
, some research shows that their food is unhealthy and can cause obesity and health issues.
Therefore
 the gourmet should apply some taxes for the junk food industry. To conclude, I think advertising plays a crucial part in the marketing field, but sometimes give people misleading information and fool them to buy the product.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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