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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of their studies. Do the Advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting news are still popular.
First
 of all, reading
newspaper
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the newspaper
a newspaper
 has become ardent habit of many people.
Everyone whether
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Everyone, whether
 from affluent or middle class are seen desperately waiting for paper in
morning
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the morning
 and enjoy it reading with
cup
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a cup
 of tea.
Moreover
, these are the
portable
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most portable
, cheapest an easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can be carried from one place to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 in bag and available at
economical price
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economical prices
an economical price
. It is so handy and merely by continuing flip of pages can make you omniscient.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
electricity and other appliances are not required.
Moreover
,
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,
the other attachments are like icing on the cake.
For instance
, the Hindustan times
has
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have
 multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and so on.
However
, undoubtedly, technology has given the radical approach to reading news,
for example
,
videos
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the videos
 provide
full and clear view
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a full and clear view
 to reading
besides
 that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that
technophobic
 will be having no place in
this
 ever-advanced modern world. To conclude, the lives of people are drastically affected by advanced versions of technology yet, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the
existence
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existing
 traditional newspaper and magazines.
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