Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem

Today, in
this
modern world globalization has been increasing rapidly at
fast pace
Suggestion
a fast pace
. In order to run along with
this
competitive world people are busy in working most of their time in a day. As money is essential for our survival, not a single day goes without working. Many people are struggling to get free time for the exercise to keep their lives healthy. The main reason for
this
is
longest
Suggestion
long
longer
working hours. Employers need to reduce the working hours to employees so that they will have some time to concentrate on their physical self too. The one more reason for people finding difficulty to get exercise is travelling longest distances to their workplaces,
this
is making them too tired to do
ther
of them or themselves
their
the
other
work at home. And coming to job types people are doing
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
is mostly sitting
infront
Suggestion
in front
of
computer
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a computer
the computer
for
longer
Suggestion
long
hours.
This
is a serious concern because it doesn't involve any physical work, which have
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
adverse effects on their health.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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