Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

The Earth
has always been suffering
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has always suffered
from a large number of environmental issues.
Although
some people believe that rare animals and
plants
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plant
extinction is amongst the most critical problems to be tackled, some others assert that there are more urgent threats. I believe that the latter idea would be more sensible. A great deal of flora and fauna are on the verge of extinction due to inconsiderate human activities. Having said that, a large number of these species will be totally disappeared if human did not take
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
deterrent actions to curb the problem
such
as developing breeding programs in zoos.
Moreover
, disappearing a particular plant or animal may threaten the nature cycle since they provide
food supply
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a food supply
for other animals.
consequently
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Consequently
, lack of food may lead to a chain destruction in nature.
However
, there are innumerable environmental threats putting our nature at risk.
Firstly
, water crisis, which has been an alarming trend since
last
decade, is influencing a wide range of living creatures
such
as human, animals and plants.
Secondly
, air pollution, which is a prevalent issue in most metropolitan cities, has caused
human
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humanity
to suffer from a plethora of respiratory system ailments due to inhaling noxious gases produced by car exhausts and factories.
Thirdly
, poverty and hunger is an absolutely more pivotal issue to be regarded than endangered animals. Not only is it a commonplace problem in underdeveloped countries, but it has been an unprecedented issue in a handful of
developed
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developers
and affluent countries due to
economic downturn
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the economic downturn
. In conclusion,
although
endangered animals should be preserved and supported, I believe that lack of water, air pollution and continued impoverishment are more vital issues to be addressed and should be taken more seriously as it directly deals with human dignity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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