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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspaper will remain then most important source of news.

#people #news #internet #newspaper #source
Internet
 is undertaking the world by storm, you get every single
information
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 at your
finger tip
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 on
you
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mobile phones and computers. With growing applications in
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the digital
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 world and
progressive
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 lifestyle, people have
access
 to
news
 using
internet
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. It’s a convenient way to peek
in
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 the world, yet conventional
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newspapers
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newspaper
 are still on the run serving
to
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almost every single person who doesn’t have
access
 to
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internet
. So I firmly agree that
newspaper
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 is the most important source of
news
.
To begin
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internet
 has
plethora
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 of information on every subject human deals
in
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his
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their
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 daily life ranging from entertainment, education,
news
, work etc all you need is a computer or
smart phone
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. With
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advancement
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advancements
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 in lifestyle and time
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limitations
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limitation
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 people often read
news
 on the
internet
 thereby saving time and paper, thanks to
the
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technology.
Although
internet
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the internet
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 is more prevalent it is unable to serve the fundamental concept of
news
that
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which
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 is to communicate information to the entire
citizen
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citizens
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 of the country.
For
instance
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 developing nations fall short when it comes to
use
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the use
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 of
internet
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the internet
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,
older
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the older
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 generation, villagers and other
unfortunates
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doesn’t
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people don’t
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 have
access
 to
internet
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the internet
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, and
that is
 where
news paper
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newspapers
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serves
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serve
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 them best. Conventional
newspaper
 is the most easy and affordable means of fetching
news
. It’s a simple form of communication means and
entire
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the entire
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 nation has
access
 to
newspaper
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newspapers
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. Many Indian towns and villages
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local library which serves them for free.
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 it comes with a negligible price, no
smart phones
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smartphones
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 and
internet
 data required. So to summon my decision with the fact that
although
 many people strive to read
news
 on the
internet
,
newspaper
 still remains to most vital source of
news
 as it fulfills the purpose with no expensive gadgets and
internet
 service. That makes the
newspaper
most
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 important source
till
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 date.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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