The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are several similarities between what younger and older
people
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say makes them most happy.
However
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, there are several striking differences.
Firstly
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, let us look at the similarities. It is noticeable that for both younger and older
people
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, the highest percentage says that achievement at work brings them most
happiness
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: 31% for the younger age group and 32% for the older group. Doing hobbies is
also
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very important for both groups: the
second
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largest percentage of both age groups mention doing hobbies as making them most happy. Turning now to the differences, many younger
people
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regard having a good appearance as extremely important: 18% of them state
this
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brings them most
happiness
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.
This
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is followed by 15% who state that travel brings them
happiness
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. Neither of these two factors is mentioned by older
people
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.
Instead
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, 20% of older
people
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report that having financial security is most important to their
happiness
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and 14% say they feel most happy when they are with their family.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, happiness with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • age groups
  • responses
  • happiness factors
  • participants
  • contribute
  • compare
  • patterns
  • differences
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