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The map below shows two proposed sites foe a new adventure company in the Caribbean. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two proposed sites foe a new adventure company in the Caribbean. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 map depicts
about
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the planning to establish the new adventure company on the Caribbean
island
 by having two
site
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sites
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 to choose from. Except for the important places, it
also
 shows
about
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animal habitats, waterways, and roads.
Site
 one locates on the west of the
island
 and near the ocean. Above
of
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S1, there is the biggest town
in
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this
island
, George Town. Base and Airport place not so far from S1, in the south of the area. There are
also
 roads and waterways
locate
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 near the
site
. It seems
this
 location lives among the
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most importance
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importance
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 and the most
advancement
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 zone of
this
island
.
Site
 two
place
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places
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on
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in
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 the almost
center
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centre
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 of
this
island
. There
also
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is also
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 have road and waterway through,
however
,
There
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there
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 has
not
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no
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 crucial
settlement
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settlements
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live
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life
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 near
beside
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Two Boats Village.
Nevertheless
, its places among the animal habitats
as well as
 near the peak more than S1.
Overall
, each
site
 has
own
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its own
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 benefit, S1 live
nearly
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near
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 the big settlement and the airport, and S2 seems to locate among
the
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nature than S1.
Therefore
, the adventure company should decide from
this
 information
that
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where is proper to establish their company.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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