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Subjects such as art, sport and music are being dropped from the school curriculum for subjects like information technology. Many children suffer as a result of these changes. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue
that is
 subjects
such
 as art, sport and music are being dropped from school academic because these subjects are not much useful to build outstanding career. Some people
also
 believe that these subjects have been replaced with core subjects like information technology, computer and so on. A lion's share of society favours it.
However
, the rest goes averse it. The following paragraph would highlight my personal perspective along with apt example. I do not see eye to eye with a central idea for various reasons.
First
 and foremost, all schools have to focus on an overall personality development of students rather than choose those subjects which only required to learn when take up as a career related point of view. In fact, nowadays diverse fields like music, art, dancing, had a greater scope to turn dreams into reality.
Moreover
, these subjects learning
also
 helpful to identify the hidden talent of students because not everyone wants to do a job in IT industries.
Secondly
, by considering these former subjects students can aware about what's happening around them. So, schools have to choose subjects as per the interest of students.
As a result
, they can studies that particular subject with more concentration power and effectiveness.
On the other hand
, People believe that subjects like music, arts, and dancing were the only way of distraction from studies. They believe that if they studied core subjects like information technology and computers in former school days, so they gain some basic knowledge about it which helpful to build a better career and get a more job opportunities. To substantiate there is an epitome of rapid growth of IT sector. To conclude, I would like to state that both
point
Suggestion
points
 of view are relevant and valid. But I believe that the
first
 view is more effective and powerful. So, school curriculum have to add
this
 subjects.

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