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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their happiness, but some people believe there are other external factors that influence us. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #happiness #factors #influence
It is a debatable idea that, people can be happy their life if they concentrate on them
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another believe that some other
acivities
any specific behavior
activities
 are makes masses happy
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 According to my opinion
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 a human being more happy if they will think rather than other people, both views will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. To embark with, those who's
believe
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believes
 people can live happy, if they live separately because in
this
 busy world, nobody have time to spend with other masses. The human
are
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is
 very busy in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 daily routine and they will not get time to spend with friend and family. Because of the less interaction with
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 folks they will not stay happy. For
a
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an
 example, in the
foregin
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 countries, people are independent and they are not willing to share their
feeling
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feelings
 with another human.
Moreover
,
in
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this time its
this
 time its very hard to express the emotion in front of others, so masses believe that, they can live happy without sharing their emotional with
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people. To be more precise, if someone
share
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shares
 his feelings with others than they are
statring
a turn to be a starter (in a game at the beginning)
starting
staring
stating
 to
makes
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make
 jokes
of
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about
 that person in the front of others.
However
, who's has different thought regarding
this
, some family members are very attached to each others and they will not be hidden from other families. They are expecting that,
every thing
all things
everything
 which is happening the home will discuss with all
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a
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an
 example, in the
india
either extremity of something that has length
end
 most people live in the joint family
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 so love to express their feelings with others members. Along with it, some other factors
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 like rewards for hard working, promotions
also makes
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also make
 people happier. If they are doing hardworking at the workplace and not rewards or appreciate
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 it will hurt to
human
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humans
 inside very badly. To more justify, these external factors
makes
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make
 folks more happier of they will
getting
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get
 their rewards, so they will more concentrate on
thier
of them or themselves
their
 duties. At the end, human are more responsible for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 happiness if they concentrate on them rather to depend on other factors.
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