Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

In the era of the digitalisation, people
are rely
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are relying
rely
are relied
have relied
on digital gadgets
such
as mobile and computers. They are controlling
world
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the world
by touch of
finger
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a finger
. With the help of electronic devices, social sites are growing and popular faster than ever. In my point of view, I totally agree that social sites are
most worst
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worse
worst
things in
everybodys
all people
everybody
and
individuals
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individual
life today. I want to
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initiate
my view
from
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of
family life. Before 20 years ago, people were not
introducing
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introduced
by the social media. At that
time
they were used to meet each other by going to their houses and enjoy a day or week
together but
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together, but
now they
are doing meeting
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are meeting
each other by
video calling feature
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a video calling feature
the video calling feature
of the digital world.
Furthermore
, they do not have
time
for their children.
For instance
, individual spend an average 4 to 5 hours for checking Intagram, Facebook and Whatsapp, according to
survey
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the survey
a survey
. Because of that the generation gap
happens
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is happening
nowadays.
Secondly
,
lets
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let's
talk about
effect
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the effect
on
sociate
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
by using social networking sites. A violation is the only
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the child of your aunt or uncle
cousin
season
of social media. We are seeing, Any scenario
happens people
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happens, people
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things
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thing, then
thing then
then
viral that video to
excites
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excite
people toward violation.
For example
, in India people are using social media
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a raised horizontal surface
platforms
to violation on
descrimination
the opening of a subject to widespread discussion and debate
dissemination
to each group
such
as Hindu and Muslim.
In addition
, people who using
facebook
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Facebook
more they are not interesting in festival and rituals. They just put their stories and timeline like happy new year.
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On
the contrary, it is
incredible platform
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an incredible platform
to spread social
masseges
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
messages
massages
in the world very fast and great effective. In todays hard and fast era, people do not have too much
time
. They are busy in their hectic
scheduale
plan for an activity or event
schedule
schedules
. For them it is
amazing tool
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an amazing tool
to get in touch with
freind
, family ad society. It works as a storage of good memories and good
time
of your life. In conclusion, social sites have good and bad thins as well. It depends on you, how you
going
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are going
to use for. It is useful to governments to spread awareness and, bad things for
family
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the family
. It
separetes
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
supports
separates
family members from their connection.

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