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Caring for children is important for the society. Do you think parents should take up a childcare training course? Give reasons and relevant examples to support your ideas You should write at least 250 words

#children #society #parents #childcare #course #support
Ever since the history of mankind, childcare is indispensable in order to bring about a bright future.
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, nowadays, there has been stigmata that parents should undergo a childcare course in order to provide the best care possible. In my perspectives, I do not concur with
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 fact that parents must be trained and they should have their own alternatives.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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