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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academics world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #academics #world
The more we share
,
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,
the more we get. Knowledge is used in the same sense.Sharing the
information
 as much as possible makes us more
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 and happy.People send us feedback at the same time and always adds to our data.
Although
, it has both advantages and disadvantages. Scientific research is one
of important field
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important field
 and always keep on adding new data every minute. It is the ongoing research by our
talentedand
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talented and
 hard working scientists, we are able to stand beside other nation
.
Accept space
.
 Atom bomb, nuclear bomb
,
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 approach to
moon
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the moon
,
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 visit to
mangal
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Mangal
,
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,
all these are possible by the spirit and
harwork
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the havoc
havoc
 of our
great
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greatest
 scientists.All
these
denotes a person or thing
this
inforamtion
a message received and understood
information
are shared
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is shared
 freely on
internet
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the internet
.It makes us all updated with
latest findings
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the latest findings
. In the business
world
, there is a lot of competition at each and every step.The seller needs to mention each and every basic detail of its product
.
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In order to launch its product in
market
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the market
,
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,
 he needs to see marketing and approach the mindset of people. All
this
 is possible if he shares all the
information
 needed to the customer.We can take the example of a smartphone, .
it
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It
 needs to specify its RAM
,
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,
ROM
,
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SIZE, CAMERA
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
inorder
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in order
 to over beat existing version and other models of
same price
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the same price
.
However
,
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,
 there are
number
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a number
 of academic institutions opened in the country. Each has its own
speaciality
an asset of special worth or utility
speciality
specialities
. So as to highlight the particular good things
,
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,
 each academic
world
 makes their own policies and publish them in newspapers
,
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,
 put on internet sites or use banners in
whole city
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the whole city
.
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.
All these
information
 are made public in order to attract the new talents
,
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,
 arouse the curiosity about their
academics
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academic
world
. Above all
,
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,
insite
clear or deep perception of a situation
insight
onset
inside
 of many advantages
,
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,
 it has some downside.In case each and every
information
 about research is made public
,
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,
 nations will become rivals
instead
 of friends. Even the terrorism will go ahead a step as much as it is today.Businesses will move in to loss if all the confidential data is leaked or made public.Each Academic
world
 has its own knowledge
,
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,
which is not to be shared freely
.
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.
 In the nutshell
,
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,
sharing
information
 is
good but
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good, but
 to an extent.A teacher never imparts its complete knowledge
,
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,
 he always shares as much as needed
to
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for
 the student.
Although
,
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,
student thinks he has now same knowledge as
teacher
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a teacher
.
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