Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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In today's date, most of the people who are busy with their job, get quite less or no
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to work out either during the weekday or in their leisure
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which result in many types of fitness issues. In my opinion, long working hours and addiction to mobile and television are the reasons for not getting enough
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to do any physical activity.
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, many people exhausted after working extra hours in the office and when they are back from office used to spend their free
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by taking a rest on their cosy sofa or bed.
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, the addiction to mobile, television and laptop is the key due to which after getting idle
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, people feel very lazy to do any physical activities. To illustrate, my brother started working extra hours just to fulfil his financial needs and to get promotion. He hardly gets
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for exercise or yoga. Gradually, he suffered from
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ailments like high blood pressure and migraine As a way of solving
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, companies should take few steps towards it,
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as by conducting
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awareness programmes and build up sports club or gym for employees in the office, where they can work out when they are not busy.
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, companies should not encourage long working hours without valid reasons. Another way, in weekends
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of sitting idle at home, they should play some outdoor games with their kids or friends. In result, more people get
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for exercise and the
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problem will reduce gradually. To conclude, people and companies should understand the value of
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and should take steps towards the
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awareness and the importance of physical exercise.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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