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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job. Others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is believed by many persons that to get a secured and valuable job, it is a necessity to have educational credentials, but others feel that,
experience
 is crucial to earn
money
 which we can attain by doing work only. I strongly believe that few streams required
degree
 to start a job, while for some occupations
experience
 is enough. On the one side, many persons encourage to study hard to obtain a
degree
 so that an individual can get employed and can start earning. If a person wants to become a Doctor, engineer or as a professor, it is pivotal for them to enhance their academic knowledge
first
, by studding in college and university and
then
 they can apply for internship to have practical
experience
 to perform better or can directly get hired by applying in related firm or place. A teacher can never teach to their pupils effectively, if they are not qualified enough. Practical
experience
 after
degree
 adds more value to their performance. On the flip side, a businessman can make
money
 through their skills and traits. They do not need any
degree
 to start a business and recruit persons to work for him in his firm as they can crack the deal with their own intelligence or by following footsteps of their mentors. The entrepreneur can brush up their skills by practice in the workplace or through getting
experience
. There is no requirement to have a
degree
. To become a cook, it is mandatory to spend huge time in the kitchen and to observe others who are masters in culinary skills. In conclusion, degrees and
experience both are
Suggestion
experience are both
 equally important and required. According to me, some fields demand a certificate to pursue
further
 and some demands
experience
 and confidence to earn
money
 and it would be better if we can focus more to fulfil the requirement of the particular field to secure the future and earn valuable
money
 by doing hard work.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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