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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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With a population of 65,000 people, Garlsdon
town
 is drafting a plan to establish a new supermarket. Two potential sites are being considered, one at the heart of the
town
 (referred
as
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to as
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 S2) and the other
on
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in
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 the
country side
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countryside
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 (referred
as
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to as
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 S1).
Site
 S2 is placed in the vast industrial area of the
town
 where the railway line passes through. The proposed S2
site
 is a
town
 centre and no traffic zone. It is
16kms
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16 km
 away from Brandson which has a population of 15,000 and
25kms
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25 km
 from Cransdon with a population of 29,000 by a main road. Both these areas are southwest and southeast of Garlsdon
town
 respectively.
This
 location is very close to all the housing residents and industrial workers.
Site
 S1 is in the countryside away from the hustle and bustle and is
12kms
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12 km
 away from Hindon.
This
 will be very close to
people
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the people
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 of Hindon which has a headcount of 10,000.
This
site
 if selected, will be located on the northwest side of Garlsdon
town
. Though both the sites have their own advantages, the pros of S2
out-weigh
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outweigh
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 the pros of S1. S2 is easily accessible to more people as it is situated right in the heart of
town
.
Also
, there are 2 areas
close-by
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close by
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 where the majority of the
citizens'
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citizens
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lives
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live
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 and have access both by rail and road.
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  • map
  • town
  • supermarket
  • site
  • overview
  • possible
  • transportation
  • access
  • surrounding
  • facilities
  • population
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