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Poor nutrition and obesity is a problem in many developed countries and some people believe that a tax on fast food would reduce the problem. Do you agree?

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Many developed nations are facing lack of good nutrition and
obesity
. To solve
this
 problem, some people argue that government should tax on fast food, but some argue that it is not a perfect solution. On the one hand, fast foods are one of the causes of poor nourishment and
obesity
. Ingredients of fast food are often greasy, which can be side-effects for our health and it is not suitable for prolonged eating.
However
, because of its reasonable price, many people are still choosing fast foods
instead
 of having a balanced-diet.
For example
, I would prefer a burger and coke for my lunch because I don't want to spend my time and money for a healthy meal.
Besides
, fast foods are available in many places. So, taxation on fast foods may bring a
second
-thought of buying and selling them to the consumers and the retailers respectively.
On the other hand
, even the government will tax on fast food, the problems of health issues will not be minimized. Only a proper diet may bring sufficient nourishment and it will be beneficial for our fitness.
For instance
, we need to have a certain amount of vegetables, fruits, fish and meats, and some ministries should educate properly to the public. Another way to solve
obesity
 is to have a regular exercise. To do so, the local authorities should provide public gyms in some places. To sum up, I partly agree to tax on fast foods, in fact, we should only focus on the other effective ways to reduce
obesity
 and poor nutrition.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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