some people believe the best way to tackle pollution is by paying tax others disagree. discuss both views and state your opinion
In the modern world, nowadays the environmental issue is numerous problems in many countries. which is the
government
pay
attention to Wrong verb form
paying
this
problem
. Some people
think that the solution
to this
problem
is the
Change preposition
for the
government
should increase taxation. In my opinion, I believe that taxes
is
the best method for Change the verb form
are
this
problem
.
To begin
with, the solution
to countering the
Correct article usage
apply
pollution
by addition
Replace the word
add
taxes
, if the government
increase taxes
, the pollution
awareness of people
will be better than the
past. Because they will be Change preposition
in the
concern
about the cost of punishment, which Wrong verb form
concerned
is
result Verb problem
will
to
more expense. Change preposition
in
Moreover
, the taxes
from this
solution
would be managed by the government
to improve their countries. For example
, they will improve facilities for recycling
industry or create new innovations to tackle Correct article usage
the recycling
this
problem
.
In contrast
, some people
argue that there are many method
to address Change to a plural noun
methods
this
problem
rather than taxes
.
Firstly
, the government
should upgrade people
knowledge about types of Change noun form
people's
pollution
and pollution
source
. Fix the agreement mistake
sources
Due to when
they know Change preposition
When
abuot
Correct your spelling
about
these information
, they will Change the determiner
this information
be protect
themselves from Change the verb form
protect
emerge
Change the verb form
emerging
pollutions
. Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
Secondly
, the government
should encourage people
to clean recycling their plastics for
reduce Change preposition
to
the
Correct article usage
apply
pollution
. Lastly
, From individual solutions
Add a comma
solutions,
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
should utilize mroe
in public transport Correct your spelling
more
than
drive Rephrase
rather than
own
cars, which have a part Correct pronoun usage
their own
for reduce
air Change preposition
in reducing
pollution
problems.
To conclude
, the
taxation is one of the best Correct article usage
apply
solution
for Change to a plural noun
solutions
improve
awareness and Change the verb form
improving
strict
Change the word
strictly
to tackle
Change the verb form
tackling
pollution
. In contrast
, there are many solution
Change to a plural noun
solutions
for
Change preposition
to
this
problem
such
as knowlegde
of Correct your spelling
knowledge
pollution
, encourage
Wrong verb form
encouraging
people
to recycle and public transport. I strongly believe in taxation.Submitted by kungslowjam on
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Structure
Ensure your essay is well-structured, starting with an introduction, followed by body paragraphs, each discussing a separate view or argument, and concluding with a summary of your stance.
Paragraphing
Aim to clearly delineate your paragraphs, utilizing one central idea per paragraph supported by relevant examples or explanations.
Flow
Keep your writing logically coherent, ensuring that ideas flow from one to the next smoothly, using transitional phrases where necessary.
Task Response
For task achievement, ensure that you fully address all parts of the task prompt, presenting a clear opinion and discussing both views as required.
Supporting Details
Integrate specific examples or data to support your points. This strengthens your argument and demonstrates a deeper understanding of the topic.
Task Achievement
You have presented a clear stance on the issue and discussed both views as the prompt requested.
Structure
Your essay demonstrates a good use of structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each argument, and a conclusion summarizing your opinion.
Flow
You've made a commendable effort to create a logically flowing narrative, employing transitions between ideas effectively.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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