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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not buy the items listed. • Say what you would like the bank to do to fix the problem. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. My name is John F Kenedy. I am the General manager of the JW Marriott hotels and resorts located on the north side of Park Road in downtown, San Fransisco. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you of the fraud of my
credit
card
. Recently I received my
credit
card
 statement which had some purchases that I had not made to my knowledge. There is some furniture from Costco
,
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 and smartphones from the Apple showroom purchased through my
credit
card
. I am requesting you take
this
 seriously and block my
credit
card
 for a
while
 until I resolve
this
 issue. I would like to get it fixed and make a formal complaint about
this
 to the police station. kindly do me a favour to get
this
 issue solved. Thank you and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully John
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task achievement
Ensure precise language and avoid ambiguity. For example, 'Recently I received my credit card statement which had some purchases that I had not made to my knowledge' can be rephrased to 'Recently, I received my credit card statement which listed purchases that I am certain I did not make.'
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your letter into clear, distinct paragraphs to discuss each point. For instance, separate the introduction from the explanation of the issue and the requested actions.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal and polite.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable for a formal letter to a bank manager, maintaining a respectful and clear tone throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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