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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Foreigners need to pay
at
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 higher costs than the locals to visit cultural and exuberant attractions in a
country
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.I agree the statement completely because tourism has become one of the most important
source
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sources
 of increase in the economy of a
country
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.
This
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 essay will discuss why the tourists from other countries need to be charged more than the citizens and how
this
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 will
relate to increase
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relate to an increase
 in economic condition.
Govenment
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Government
impose
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imposes
 higher charges on foreigners than the locals for visiting the tourist attractions because people from other countries need to understand the ethics and values of local tradition and culture.It is obvious that when we pay high for
somethwill
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value
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 it more.
Besides
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 the fact, when foreigners has come and watch the
exuberancy
joyful enthusiasm
exuberance
 of certain places they
value
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 it and spread the popularity of those places among the locals of their
country
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.
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the Seven wonders of
world
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the world
has become
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have become
 popularly
know
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known
 as these places attracted the
tourists so
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tourists, so
 well that it will be an unforgettable moment for the people who
vist
go to see a place, as for entertainment
visit
. In my opinion
,
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It is better to make foreigners pay high for tourism as it involves in increasing the economic
value
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,
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popularity of culture and tradition of a
country
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.When the popularity of tourism of a
country
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 has widely spread among different parts of the world, People coming from foreign countries will be
rised
located or moved above the surround or above the normal position
raised
rose
rushed
 through which
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 in terms of economic
value
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.
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,
econmic
of or relating to an economy, the system of production and management of material wealth
economic
value
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 of countries like India will be increased to a certain level as
foreign exchange
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the foreign exchange value
value
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 of India is very less. In conclusion
,
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Imposing higher tariff on foreigners than locals will result in the growth of a
country
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's economy.
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, Foreigners feel the importance of tradition and culture by having an insight on the ethics and values.

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