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Some people think that families have the most powerful influence on a child’s development, while others think other factors such as television, friend, music. etc. gave biggest effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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About child development, two opposing views have been discussed, one of which is related to parenting effects on personal evolution, while the other is about environmental factors
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 as television, friends. From my perspective, families are the
first
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 and most important factors of early age development. According to the perspective of some, children can receive/get more influence from their families, since they might believe that social, educational and emotional needs
first
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 meet with the family. The rationale behind their thought might be the period that passes from birth to kindergarten, which is under the influence of the parents only; since
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 period of time has significant value in a child’s progress. I
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 support
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 point of view and believe that the backbone of a nature is created at that time. For some other people,
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, the effect of televisions or friends might be more than family factor in a child’s improvement, since they might believe that specifically, human nature will be able to change in future. Yet, I am not on the same page as these people.
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, to my way of thinking gained nature cannot be changed, but possibly manipulated for temporarily.
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, personal improvement is a permanent fact, so that the influence of the environment cannot be as powerful as parent’s one. In conclusion, what can be concluded from the aforementioned remarks is that
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 some individuals
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 as advocate families are the main factors of an individual's personality. I firmly believe that despite the effects of friends and television, parents are the key that shapes a child's personality.

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