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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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It is often argued that public libraries have a principal scope, namely to give books to those who have a need. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and I think that supply expensive electronic devices may be more effective.
First
 of all, I believe that providing expensive electronics reduce the
time
 of searching and all of the information is in a better order. Even if someone has needed to search exact information, it is very simple with a computer to search it.
For example
, when I was studying we had a lot of projects to do in a short
time
. It was very simple to go into a public library and to do a search on a computer. Like that we did our projects on
time
. That’s why it’s more important to offer more ways for the stage of searching.
Secondly
, providing electronics would attract more reader with the use of technology.
In other words
, there is a strong relation between technology and the people of the 21st century. Supplying electronic devices make the libraries more attractive,
thus
 the number of readers is increasing and
also
 the finances.
For instance
, in my city when I was little there was a simple library with only books, but unfortunately there were many readers there. 10 years later when I visited the library again, I was surprised because there were more children there. I think that was because of computers that were brought there.
Thus
, advantages of electronics that keep people more inspired. To conclude, I strongly believe that public libraries who provide not only books, but
also
 electronic devices is more beneficial that public libraries that supply only books, because make
time
 of searching more short and
also
 attract more readers.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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