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You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, Complain about the situation Say why this is a problem And propose ways to reduce the noise Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’ Do not write any addresses Write at least 150 words

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Good afternoon, dear
mister
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Mister
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 Smith. My name is Anastassia, student ID number 123456. I'
m
 writing
this
 letter with the purpose of asking for your advice. I'
m
 living now in a University residens, and, unfortunately, my room is beside the new restaurant. It's open until 1 a.
m
., and my windows are over the entrance to the restaurant. On the one hand, I can't sleep with the window closed.
On the other hand
 - I can't open it
due to
 the noise from the people. There are a lot of customers, they are standing under my window to smoke, and talk.
I'
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I have
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m
 not slept enough for the
last
 2 weeks,
furthermore
, it
affects
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 my academic achievements. I desperately have to find some solutions to
this
 problem. Maybe it will be possible to avoid standing all these people under my window? Or possibly you have another room, similar to mine, that I can move in? Looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Anastassia.
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accuracy
Ensure there are no grammatical mistakes for a polished letter, such as 'residens' which should be 'residence'.
task achievement
Elaborate more on why this is significantly impacting your studies for greater clarity and to strengthen your request.
logical structure
The letter follows a logical structure and clearly presents the problem, reason, and proposed solutions.
suitable writing tone
The tone is appropriate and respectful, fitting the context of a formal letter to a university governor.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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