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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays
life
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's speed changes every aspect of human
life
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.
This
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 issue affects on consumption pattern and can get pros and cons for everyone. There is much research about the rise of convenience foods in modern society and it might be helpful for raising knowledge among people. The first and most important point about convenience
food
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 is its price. people can purchase any kind of
food
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 at a fair price,
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 quality.
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, if you bought chain
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, you would be satisfied.
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 the price and quality of
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food
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, every consumer will be happy.
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, eating fast
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 can save time and money. As a blue-collar worker, in my personal
life
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 using fast
food
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 is the only option that I have. What I mean is that speed is the uncutble part of my
life
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.
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 it can help the public, they must consider the disadvantages of
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 lifestyle. We know about harms related to fast
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such
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 as
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 heart disease, kidney and liver disease, and related diseases in the stomach.
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, my uncle used to eat a lot of junky
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 and
this
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 habit lead to his death. In
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 approach seems the advantages outweigh the disadvantages can be a principal question
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 chosen by society. In short, the rise of convenience foods can be a combination of advantages and disadvantages that are considered by people. Everyone based on
life
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 must choose the consumption pattern and be aware of the consequences.
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