WRITING TASK2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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The job market has always been dependent on supply and demand. And that affects people in different professions. As successful professional athletes can have way much bigger

income

than other important professions.

This

essay will discuss two opposite views of how can that be justified? And how it can be unfair.

Firstly

, People who think sports professionals are deserving of more

money

than any other professional. They believe that being an athlete is not an easy job,

nonetheless

being a successful one. As it requires certain criteria in an individual and that makes them unique,

therefore

, deserving bigger

income

For instance

, if the fastest runner in the world sat a record no one else has ever achieved before him,

then

how could he not earn the most?

That is

why successful sports professionals are justified to earn more

money

than other important Professions. Meanwhile, other opposing opinion states that it is unfair for professionals, to have a larger

income

than other professions.

Although

sports professionals may have unique characteristics, they save

also

equal to doctors

also

equal to doctors save people's lives.

Moreover

, doctors demand sensitive precision in their work which is exhausting. As an example, a surgeon who operates a 7 hours on a patient's heart to bring him back to life, is definitely no less than a footballer. And

that is

why it is unfair to make the

first

earn more

money

than any other professional. In conclusion,

this

essay discussed how justified it is for sports professionals to make more

money

as they require definite skills which is unique in individuals and not everyone has them.

In addition

to that,

this

essay

also

discussed how unfair that could be, because other jobs acquire similar precision and uniqueness too. In my opinion, l entirely agrees with the

second

view. Being a doctor myself is a very difficult job

that is

as important as professional sports in terms of

income

. And unless we have equal payment, we will still have to face other kinds of problems

such

as racism and unemployment.

Tue Mar 10 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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14Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

342 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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