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Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

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Nowadays, it is undeniable that online purchasing is prevail due to its convenience and simplicity.
Although
 consumers benefit from
this
, there have been adversely affecting on our environment and increasing unemployment rate.
This
 essay will discuss these key issues.
To begin
 with, there is ample evidence that online trades have created more waste and garbage, worsened air pollution, and rendered more traffic congestion. The reason behind
this
 is twofold,
firstly
, online retailers have to place more foams and wrapping paper in cardboard boxes to ensure goods deliver to buyers’ address safely, which
subsequently
 create excessive waste and garbage for buyers and government to dispose.
Secondly
, one of the advantages of online shopping is that cargoes will be delivered to customers’ house, which leads to numerous driving of the truck driver and consumption of a substantial amount of petroleum. Having so many deliveries, the online retailer
such
 as Amazon or Ebay worsen traffic congestion and increase the carbon dioxide emissions. An extensive survey by Washington University showed that delivering companies like UPS and DHL reveal that their gas expenses of 2010-2020 have increased 40% compared to the
last
 decade.
Furthermore
,
although
 online trades have helped lots of brands expanding their market share, there are still employees losing their jobs since the reality stores are closing and cutting their renting cost of the brands.
Such
 phenomenon and business strategy lead to an increasing unemployment rate for the basic level staff,
such
 as store sales, janitor and cashier. In the short term, there might be some unemployed people who go to steal or rob, endanger the society’s safety and stability. Some staff,
however
, might realize that learning new knowledge and skills is the key to survive and succeed in the near future, which may encourage them to create more productivity and small business, benefiting the community and economy. An illustration of
this
 is that enormous small businesses have been operated on American Ebay and Chinese Alibaba. In conclusion, online shopping created more packaging waste and garbage for government to deal with more energy and machines, more deliveries worsen air pollution and traffic congestion, and an increasing rate of unemployment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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