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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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School life plays a vital role in the learning phase of a child.
Child
Suggestion
The child
learn
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learns
 from the given atmosphere around him during the school life. Either it should be boarding school or not is
debateable
open to doubt or debate
debatable
. On one hand those people who
believes
Suggestion
believe
 that boarding schools are an excellent option for children argues that, in boarding
schools
Suggestion
school
 children live under the supervision of teachers and trained tutors and learn discipline. Boarding schools monitor student activities and give them proper
time
Use synonyms
 for
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
, sports and education. Children learn discipline in their daily routine which could be helpful in their remaining life. Boarding schools provide an educational infrastructure and atmosphere where children learn the abilities of healthy competition in the field of sports and education. Children pick up the lesson of
time
Use synonyms
 management as well as effective use of
time
Use synonyms
. Whereas, on
other hand those
Suggestion
the other hand, those
the other hand those
 who disagree cited that the
children
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children's
child
 lives in boarding all the
time
Use synonyms
 could not get love and affection of their parents and it causes distance between children and their parents which has long lasting impact on their lives. Children would
also
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 be unable to discuss their day to day problems with their parents and get suitable advice to solve them in a better way. Sometimes children get annoyed from their
routine but
Accept comma addition
routine, but
 could not escaped off. In a nutshell, it seems that Boarding schools are a better option but not an excellent option because it
effects
have an effect upon
affects
 the relationship between children and their parents.

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