Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your opinion.

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While some people believe that it is better to share information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world, others argue that some knowledge is too

important

Suggestion

importantly

or valuable to be shared freely. In

this

essay I will discuss both these notions and explain why I agree with the former.

Firstly

, people who think some data is too beneficial to publish freely may argue that it’s having a great financial value and could lead to anti-competitive conduction by individuals and companies. To illustrate

this

, the ingredient of Coca-Cola is not published from the beginning of the company because if they released the secret, all opponents could reach same taste and Coca-Cola will lose their value. Another point could be the effort which was given to reaching that data.

This

effort might be money, work or time and it can be unfair to share it without expecting something in return.

On the other hand

this

type of intelligence should share with everyone because of their profits and meanings for humanity. Especially, scientific researches about health problems because

this

info can lead to cure diseases which people are suffering and it will be greedy to keep it for financial benefits.

Furthermore

, business and academic world is

also

same with the aforementioned. As long as they are being beneficial to humanity, every data must be shared in every area because human life is worth more than money and they can be used for better conditions and future. In conclusion, despite the power and financial values of data about science, business and education, I wholeheartedly believe these should be shared freely because of their importance for humanity.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

275 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

information sharing
scientific research
business
academic world
advancement of knowledge
progress
collaboration
cross-disciplinary research
open access
democratization of information
transparency
credibility
intellectual property
security concerns
commercial interests

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