Some people believe that is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these view and give your opinion.

While some people believe that it is better to share information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world, others argue that some knowledge is too
important
Suggestion
importantly
or valuable to be shared freely. In
this
essay I will discuss both these notions and explain why I agree with the former.
Firstly
, people who think some data is too beneficial to publish freely may argue that it’s having a great financial value and could lead to anti-competitive conduction by individuals and companies. To illustrate
this
, the ingredient of Coca-Cola is not published from the beginning of the company because if they released the secret, all opponents could reach same taste and Coca-Cola will lose their value. Another point could be the effort which was given to reaching that data.
This
effort might be money, work or time and it can be unfair to share it without expecting something in return.
On the other hand
,
this
type of intelligence should share with everyone because of their profits and meanings for humanity. Especially, scientific researches about health problems because
this
info can lead to cure diseases which people are suffering and it will be greedy to keep it for financial benefits.
Furthermore
, business and academic world is
also
same with the aforementioned. As long as they are being beneficial to humanity, every data must be shared in every area because human life is worth more than money and they can be used for better conditions and future. In conclusion, despite the power and financial values of data about science, business and education, I wholeheartedly believe these should be shared freely because of their importance for humanity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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