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it is compulsory for children to attend school between the ages of 5 and 16. many people are in favour of raising the age at which children must start their schooling to 6 or 7, and the age at which they are allowed to stop to 17or 18. people of this view believe it is important for young children to spend more time with their parents, while they believe teenagers would gain more inform staying in school longer

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