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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many
research
 organizations are doing lots of
research
 related to different subjects and for that they constitute different teams to work on it. Some people believe that sharing much
information
 as possible in scientific
research
, business and academic world whilst the other
believe
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believes
 that some
information
 is too
importantly
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important
 or too valuable to be shared freely. In
this
 essay will discuss both the issues and
also
 give my opinion regarding.
To begin
 with, many organization needs to gather a wide range of
information
 while working on any particular scientific
research
. They do need to constitute the teams of researchers and isolate the collected
information
accordingly
, so that the researcher can work on it freely and independently and they
also
 built infrastructure like cloud computing to retrieve any
information
.
Also it
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Also, it
 seems in the case of the business world where a number of employees are working under same infrastructure and have opened access to any
information but
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information, but
 no doubt they
also
 have some unbreakable firewall which restrict the user to access any significant data of the company.
Similarly in
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Similarly, in
 the case of
acedemic
associated with academia or an academy
academic
academics
academies
 where the
information
 related to student records, annual
acedamic
associated with academia or an academy
academic
curriculam
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
 activities

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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