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Should private schools receive government funding? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#schools #government
In recent years, people argue whether private should receive funding from the Government. In my opinion, the Government will spend more
money
 on their schools and downsizing the private schools as much as possible.
To begin
 with, private schools charge more
money
 from parents in terms of improving their infrastructure, smart class training and like many things.
This
 is because the Government schools'
education
 and quality are questionable.
Therefore
, parents have taken care of children's
education
 seriously and they do not have to hesitate to spend much
money
. If the Government concerns and spend more
money
 on their schools and improving standards, parents will prefer the Government schools as their
first
 choice for their children's
education
.
For instance
, Australia and Canada like many developed countries have no private schools and provide
education
 through their schools only to the children.
Secondly
, in India like many developing countries, peoples' income is very less.
However
, private schools have overlooked them and making business over their children's
education
.
Moreover
, the outcome of children's
education
also
 questionable.
Therefore
, the Government should keep an eye on them and pass restrictions to control them in all their values.
Consequently
, they will
further
 give a good
education
 with values to the children and
also
 charge reasonable
money
 from their parents.
For instance
, the Indian Government has recently passed the law that the private schools should follow only the fee structure which has been created by the Government. To conclude,
education
 is cost-less thing and one of the rights for all human beings, so the developing countries must run the
education
 on their own and completely remove the privatization as soon as possible.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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