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A healthy person is often described as a person who has a good diet, gets a lot of exercise and avoids stress. what do people do to stay healthy in your country?

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Over a
last
 couple of years, people of Pakistan have become more health-conscious and are making great efforts to stay healthy. They maintain a healthy lifestyle by consuming balanced food with beneficial nutrition, working out and finding effective ways to relieve pressure. For a sound life, having a good nitrous diet is essential. People of my country, Pakistan, eat a balanced diet, which includes food containing proteins, carbohydrates, grains, diary product and fats (but in limited amounts).
For example
, they prefer to eat organic vegetables more and consume good amount of milk on a daily basis in order to stay fit both internally and physically. Many individuals
also
 do exercise to maintain fitness. Some of them do daily workout and others prefer, simply going to walk to burn calories and keep themselves fit depending on their schedule.
for
Suggestion
For
 instance, my mother like to go for a walk every day, 10 minutes after dinner which helps not only in digestion but
also
 maintains blood sugar levels. As more and more people here in my country have realized that psychological well-being is vital for a person's health. Local community finds ways to relax themselves through personal relaxation like aromatherapy and other entertainment facilities etc. From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that having a sound mind in a sound body leads to happier and healthier life.

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