There seems to be an increase number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The rate of serious crimes has been rising annually. While some people argue that capital punishment is the efficient way to deter offences, I believe that criminals desire a chance to rehabilitate. On the one hand, contemporary society suffers from an increasing number of severe crimes,

such

as robbing, assault, kidnapping, and thefts. Offenders often have committed crimes due to the desire to earn easy money or influence of the adverse impact of their surroundings. The best way of

deterrent

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deterring

such

crimes is death penalty thought

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people. As a prime example can be considered a

significantly

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significant

decline in the level of serious crimes in

Turkey which

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Turkey, which

happened after accepting new legislation allowing apply capital punishment.

However

, I am convinced that each individual should be given chance to rehabilitate.

On the other hand

, it is true that most people cannot control themselves in hard or conflict situations so can do wrong things. That

individuals

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individual

often regret

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often regrets

after committing bad things which can lead to imprisonment. If they

convict

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are convicted

as guilty, they will send to prison where they can learn new skills in committing offences from other criminals.

Therefore

, it would be better to give them probation term to rehabilitate.

For example

, Scandinavian countries practice

such

approach to prisoners, they do not isolate that

people but

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person, but

person but

force them

make

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to make

community services as a sentence.

As a result

this

practice

has been giving

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has given

a positive result in

rehabilitation

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the rehabilitation

of criminals. I believe that

this

was the fairest way in terms of ethical side. In conclusion,

although

the number of crimes has been rising constantly, there should be a chance to rehabilitate because it works in most cases.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

deterrent
recidivism
rehabilitation
ethical considerations
economic factors
social factors
community policing
public opinion
recidivism rates
community-driven initiatives
modern policing methods
death penalty
serious crimes
crime rates

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There seems to be an increase number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some countries have implemented mandatory community service programs for young people. In these programs, children aged 16 to 18 do charity work, help old people or work with animals. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this for young people?

Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or mall to do their shopping. Is this positive kr negative development?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?