You participated in a public event organized at a local park. Write a letter to the event organizer. In your letter tell them some feedback about the event; explain what you particularly enjoyed; give some suggestions for improvement.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
epistle regarding the public event of gathering local inhabitants at a park. It was an incredible experience to meet all the residents in one place. Honestly, not only me but
also
my family members were awestruck after watching the magnificent beauty of the park, as the way you decorated the park with flowers amused us a lot.
Moreover
, my parents usually tend to stay at home
instead
of going anywhere, but yesterday after attending
this
event, their mindsets were changed, as today they went for a walk. Let me talk about the event, all activities were admirable, especially those moments when the entire city's dwellers danced together without having any hard feelings for each other impressed me a lot.
Along with
this
, I do enjoy the continental food, which you have particularly arranged for all of us.
Although
all arrangements were up to mark, we were confronting the problem of less space to sit. I want that next time if you can provide some additional chairs to have sit. I hope you will not mind my suggestion. Yours faithfully, Gurkeerat
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coherence cohesion
Your letter has a good structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. To improve, focus on creating even smoother transitions between paragraphs for enhanced flow.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • event organizer
  • public event
  • local park
  • feedback
  • organized
  • community engagement
  • performances
  • logistical
  • facilities
  • crowd management
  • inclusivity
  • local businesses
  • atmosphere
  • volunteer
  • memorable
  • suggestions for improvement
  • upcoming events
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