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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
Life
 is a gift, we have heard
this
 saying often in our lives, but have we given it little thought what
life
 is all about??
Life
 is a journey that starts when someone is born and end with death,
life
 has too many
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
calories
,
life
 can be happy, miserable, meaningful, meaningless,
aimbitious
having a strong desire for success or achievement
ambitious
 and lost. Since the inception of
human race
Suggestion
the human race
, we've always endeavoured to make things more convenient for us.
Life
 when spent with luxuries is often considered a good
life
.
Technology
 is just an aspect of human development towards the betterment of
life
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life, however
however
,
technology
 has its pros and cons.
Technology
 can benefit us in many ways,
infact our
Accept comma addition
in fact, our
in fact our
 lives are completely changed with
technology
. Someone a century ago would not have imagined the kind of
life
 we are living today, the amenities bestowed by
technology
is
Suggestion
are
 un-countable. We have
means
Suggestion
the means
 to travel, faster than ever. We can communicate miles away without even moving an inch. We can witness the
exhalirating
making lively and cheerful
exhilarating
 events happening
aroud
in the area or vicinity
around
 the world, without even leaving our room. We can learn, earn, get entertained at our homes. All of
this
 is the blessing of
technology
 and to be fair
technology
 has made
life
 much better.
However
,
technology
 has
also
 impacted human race in not very positive way.
For example
: People were healthier
generaly
usually; as a rule
generally
, when they used to play physical sports, but now with the spread of
technology
 people don't often go out to play, they engage in computer games and
that is
 not a very healthy
habbit
an established custom
habit
. Another downside of
technology
 is that, it has limited human interaction to very minimal and only for use. We can see the world, but we are often unaware of our family matters,
this
 is only because we spent much time on social media and we've lost interest in human
intereaction
a mutual or reciprocal action; interacting
interaction
interactions
, which is causing
disfunction
(medicine) any disturbance in the functioning of an organ or body part or a disturbance in the functioning of a social group
dysfunction
 is society as
whole
Suggestion
a whole
. So I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
,
technology
 has changed human lives in a positive way in general and we can benefit from
technology
, but we
also
 need to take care of our lives, our societies, our values and people around us. So, My
suggesstion
an idea that is suggested
suggestion
is use
Suggestion
is to use
 the
technology
,
donot
Suggestion
do not
 misuse it

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