The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
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leisure activities including reading, hiking, theatre, watching TV and surfing the web, undertaken by the elderly in the United States for a period of thirty years, starting from 1980 up to 2010.
Overall
, it is noted that all activities but one,
that is
going to the theatre, eventually became more popular among the elderly in 2010 compared to 1980, showing
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much more active participation in leisure activities taken by the elderly in 2010. The most popular activity in 1980 was watching TV
while
in 2010 hiking became the most frequent hobby with 60% and 80%
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participants
respectively.
On the other hand
, the least favourite activity in 1980 was surfing the internet which was undertaken by only 5%
while
the least popular hobby in 2010 was attending the theatre, which dropped by 5% from its 50%
participance
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participants
in 1980. It is noteworthy that hiking showed an immense increase in participation since it rose from 20% to 80% in 2010 becoming the most frequent leisure activity of the elderly, with 8 out of 10 of the elderly in America going
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hiking.

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