The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

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leisure activities including reading, hiking, theatre, watching TV and surfing the web, undertaken by the elderly in the United States for a period of thirty years, starting from 1980 up to 2010.

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, it is noted that all activities but one,

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going to the theatre, eventually became more popular among the elderly in 2010 compared to 1980, showing

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much more active participation in leisure activities taken by the elderly in 2010. The most popular activity in 1980 was watching TV

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in 2010 hiking became the most frequent hobby with 60% and 80%

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participants

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, the least favourite activity in 1980 was surfing the internet which was undertaken by only 5%

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the least popular hobby in 2010 was attending the theatre, which dropped by 5% from its 50%

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participants

in 1980. It is noteworthy that hiking showed an immense increase in participation since it rose from 20% to 80% in 2010 becoming the most frequent leisure activity of the elderly, with 8 out of 10 of the elderly in America going

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hiking.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

187 words

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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Some people think advertising may have positive economic effects. Others think has negative social effects because individuals are not satisfied with what they are and what they have. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many parents are unhappy because of the increasing amount of violence in their children by computer games, TV programs, and other leisure activities. How harmful are these for children? Discuss possible solutions.

in some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think it is a positive or negative situation?

Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree.