Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
There has been a discussion revolving around whether
computers
and modern technology should be introduced into classrooms or not. Some people believe that it could help for direct teaching purposes. Others think that technology could cause more problems that have positive impacts. In this
essay, I will look into this
issue and present my way of seeing this
problem.
To start with, computers
and technology can help students find important information
on a specific topic. This
would encourage kids to dig deeper into some problems and get more knowledge of this
topic. For example
, preparing a presentation in a classroom using a computer and the internet
and then
presenting it would have a wider perspective of the topic than information
used only found in a textbook. This
could motivate kids to search for even more.
The second benefit of computers
and their programs is learning how to find information
on the Internet
. Even though the internet
has so much information
that can be found by anyone, not every fact given is right. This
could lead to misinformation and learning incorrect data. That is
why knowing how to find reliable information
is sometimes a difficult assignment, but it is trainable and could help with higher results of the education.
On the other hand
, knowing that everything can be found on the internet
can demotivate students from memories and important data. This
would lead to not knowing the most essential facts about basic things. For example
, not learning significant historical facts can lead to misunderstanding of events that take place in today's world. This
way people would become more naïve and more social and political issues would occur.
Having considered both views, I believe computers
and their programs should be used in classrooms and it would increase students' understanding of how things work by finding more information
on the internet
rather than just only in books used in classrooms.Submitted by oimigle on
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task response
To enhance your essay, it's important to articulate a more nuanced thesis statement in your introduction, explicitly addressing both sides of the argument and clearly stating your own position. This will help ground your reader from the outset.
task response
Strive for a more balanced presentation of arguments. While you present both sides, ensure each side is discussed in comparable detail and depth, which will improve the completeness of your response.
coherence and cohesion
Enhancing coherence can be achieved by improving transitions between your ideas. Consider using a wider variety of linking phrases to smoothly guide the reader from one paragraph to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to include a succinct conclusion that reiterates your stance and summarizes the key points made throughout the essay. This wraps up your discussion effectively and reinforces your argument for the reader.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite