Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?

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Artists are the people who create. Few individuals sense that performers like actors

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singers or athletes get way more wages than required

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I believe that there's nothing better than having a few hours of relaxation between everyday's work and stress

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So, even if the entertainers

are paid

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pay

too much

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they deserve it. Entertainment is a very important aspect in our lives

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Firstly

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when we see

such

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performances we grow excited leading to release of dopamine

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which is an excellent hormone that makes us cheerful.

Secondly

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Art brings something new always

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In a world where we keep on discovering and exploring

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the people always want to hear/see something fresh and unique that surprises them

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, to drain out the one's

presssure

the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)

pressure

people always choose to go to concerts or watch movies or listen to songs that are soothing

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its

it is

it's

not everyone's cup of tea to stand on a stage and perform something new always with another deal of attracting the audience too

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for

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For

example

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We watch stand up comedians and have a great

laugh but

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laugh, but

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it is

it's

too hard to come up with a new comic skit

everytime

work done in addition to regular working hours

overtime

which your public will relate to as well. Having said

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I detect that

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a member of a council

councillors

counsellors

councillor

shall be provided with the maximum income possible

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percieve

to become aware of through the senses

perceive

them to be one of the most essential people whose presence is strongly required as to keep the equilibrium in the society. Now -a- days people face so much mental stress

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depressing feelings or

vague sad

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vague, sad

thoughts in their

subconcious

just below the level of consciousness

subconscious

which they are totally unaware of

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I feel if

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people are given the power and resources they will bring peace

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Even

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they are the ones who can deal with rage and

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help to reduce the crimes as if they will settle the furious minds before hand it can stop from causing any harm

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Percieving

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Perceiving

the income of artists as

been

the state or fact of existing

being

over paid is something I would disagree

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about

with

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They are paid what they actually deserve and

its

it is

it's

nowhere hidden and people proclaim their love way too loudly

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councellor's

a member of a council

councillors

getting more income and value should be taken into consideration.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

380 words

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