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Nowadays, internet and television has given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples

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Almost everybody wants to be famous in
this
 world.
Internet
 and television gives an easier platform to become famous.
Although
 there are some negative effects of
this
 development, in my opinion, it has more positive impacts.
This
 essay would cast light on pros and cons of
this
 development.
To begin
 with, undoubtedly there is some negative impact of social media. When people comment on some issue, it gets viral due to its questions few people thinking. People start trolling him on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 and made him famous in a negative way. One
such
example
 of
such
 thing is, One person in India wrote a letter to the prime minister about to remove the reservation in jobs and somehow
this
 letter leaks on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. Due to
this
, People who belong to minority casts taken
this
 as an offence and start commenting on him. It creates a lot of issues in his personal life as well. On the flip side, Not everybody with silver spoon in his mouth. To show some unique
talent
, people use the
internet
 and social media, which helps them to showcase their
talent
 and become famous in a positive manner.
For
example
, People made videos on tick-talk and publish them on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 which helps them to become famous. Reno Mandal is
such
 an
example
, she is a bagger in India, but have a beautiful voice, one person made her singing video and posted on social media and result of
this
, she becomes famous and even get movie singing contracts.
Furthermore
, there are lots of television shows are based on
this
 format, they campaign city to city and find raw
talent
 from smaller cities. Roadies and Dance India dance are
such
 an
example
 of
this
 kind of TV shows. To conclude, with the help of social media and web, a common man gets famous for the wrong reasons which can ruin his life, but at the same time it gives thousand of people to show their
talent
 to society and become famous.
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