The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The provided line graph illustrates the average
population
of humanity in three nations in 1
year
. In the
year
1940, the
population
of aged people
at
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65 or above in
Sweden
and the USA were at 8% and 10% respectively. Between the years 1960 to 1980, both
American
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and
Sweden
people showed a slight growth in the rate of the
population
by 15%.
In contrast
,
Sweden
was just lower at 14%.
Furthermore
, the USA, in the
year
2000, slightly started to decrease until the
year
2020 with a percentage of 14% and
then
gradually rose to 23% in the
year
2040.
Whereas
Sweden
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population
showed an increasing trend from the
year
2000 to 2040 with 13%, 20%, and 25% respectively. The average
population
of Japanese people in the
year
1940 was 5%, which declined to 3% in 1960 and remained the same in the
year
1980. In the
year
2000, there was some upward change in the percentage, which was at 5% and
then
moved
with
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11% in 2020. At
last
, it showed a sky-rocketing amount of proportion in the
year
2040 at 27%. In conclusion, it can appear that the USA and
Sweden
showed an increasing trend from the
year
1940 to 2040 in the average
population
. In Japan, the community was
then
both
country
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, but in the
year
2040
population
in Japan was at
the
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highest peak.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, year, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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