In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

Multinational companies nowadays find it easy both to market their products all over the world and set up factories wherever they find it convenient. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
has had a harmful effect on our quality of life in three main areas. The
first
area is their products. Supporters of globalization would argue that multinational companies make high-quality goods available to more people. While
this
may be true to some extent, it
also
means that we have less choice of products to buy. When powerful multinational
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invade local
markets with their goods, they often force local companies with fewer resources to go out
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of business
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products, whether
we like them or not.
This
brings me to my
second
point. It is sometimes said that multinational companies and globalisation are making societies more open.
This
may be true.
However
, I would argue that
as a result
the human race is losing its cultural diversity. If we consumed different products, societies all over the world would be more varied.
This
can be seen by the fact that we all shop in 
similarmultinational
supermarkets and buy identical products wherever we live.
Thirdly
, defenders of multinational companies often point out that they provide employment.
Although
this
is undoubtedly true, it
also
means that we have become more dependent on them, which in turn makes us more vulnerable to their decisions. When,
for example
, a multinational decides to move its production facilities to another country,
this
has an adverse effect on its workers who lose their jobs. All in all, I believe that if we as voters pressured our governments to make multinational companies more
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responsible and protect
local producers from outside competition, we could have
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the benefits
of globalisation without its disadvantages.
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