Does television remove our loneliness or not? Discuss

Now a days technology
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Nowadays, technology
Nowadays technology
sector is on
boom
Suggestion
a boom
with a huge
entrainment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
categories
Suggestion
category
of devices where
television
is one of them.
Television
was invented for visual effects and impact where people get
enaged
having ones attention or mind or energy engaged
engaged
with them. Many of time people not only
enaged
having ones attention or mind or energy engaged
engaged
with
television
but
also
with the visual character in the channels and
progarmmes
an announcement of the events that will occur as part of a theatrical or sporting event
programmes
programs
. In
this
essay, I shall explain my point of view by analysing both side of the discussion. There are several
reason
Suggestion
reasons
why
television
remove our loneliness. One of them is that
television
creates a
fictious
formed or conceived by the imagination
fictitious
character where people follow them personally.
Television
make lots of people
addicated
compulsively or physiologically dependent on something habit-forming
addicted
. Mostly
childern
a young person of either sex
children
are get
Suggestion
are getting
get
influence but
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influence, but
also
they enjoy every movement of it. Watching
television
by spending hours an
hours
Suggestion
hour
is the path of
lazyness but
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laziness, but
laziness but
spending quality time with
television
is the path of knowledge sharing.
Although
this
all sound
agains
in contact with
against
the
television but
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television, but
from many of years it’s entertaining us.
Television
connect
Suggestion
connects
every home, office, hotels and many more, so we should always remember it. That’s the reason why people from all ages are directly
involve
Suggestion
involved
with it and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
programmes. To conclude
television
is the good friend of
our
things belonging to us
ours
in every ups and down. It not only remove
loneliness but
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loneliness, but
also
makes us
knowlegdeable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
,
fruitfull
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
,
livelyhood
the financial means whereby one lives
livelihood
and
connceting
get or ask advice from
consulting
with world.
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