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Does television remove our loneliness or not? Discuss

#television #loneliness
Now a days technology
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Nowadays, technology
Nowadays technology
 sector is on
boom
Suggestion
a boom
 with a huge
entrainment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
categories
Suggestion
category
 of devices where
television
 is one of them.
Television
 was invented for visual effects and impact where people get
enaged
having ones attention or mind or energy engaged
engaged
 with them. Many of time people not only
enaged
having ones attention or mind or energy engaged
engaged
 with
television
 but
also
 with the visual character in the channels and
progarmmes
an announcement of the events that will occur as part of a theatrical or sporting event
programmes
programs
. In
this
 essay, I shall explain my point of view by analysing both side of the discussion. There are several
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 why
television
 remove our loneliness. One of them is that
television
 creates a
fictious
formed or conceived by the imagination
fictitious
 character where people follow them personally.
Television
 make lots of people
addicated
compulsively or physiologically dependent on something habit-forming
addicted
. Mostly
childern
a young person of either sex
children
are get
Suggestion
are getting
get
influence but
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influence, but
also
 they enjoy every movement of it. Watching
television
 by spending hours an
hours
Suggestion
hour
 is the path of
lazyness but
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laziness, but
laziness but
 spending quality time with
television
 is the path of knowledge sharing.
Although
this
 all sound
agains
in contact with
against
 the
television but
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television, but
 from many of years it’s entertaining us.
Television
connect
Suggestion
connects
 every home, office, hotels and many more, so we should always remember it. That’s the reason why people from all ages are directly
involve
Suggestion
involved
 with it and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 programmes. To conclude
television
 is the good friend of
our
things belonging to us
ours
 in every ups and down. It not only remove
loneliness but
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loneliness, but
also
 makes us
knowlegdeable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
,
fruitfull
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
,
livelyhood
the financial means whereby one lives
livelihood
 and
connceting
get or ask advice from
consulting
 with world.
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