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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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People are using social networking sites in the rise of technological advances at the expanse of traditional way of communication.
This
 essay is to explain why I believe that the drawbacks of using social networks outstrip its benefits.As regards the pros, social networking platforms help connect people all around the world.
Therefore
, many users consider it a market in which they can exchange goods or place an order without paying extra fee.
This
 helps boost the global economy and international cooperation in general.
Secondly
, the network developers provide users with a range of attractive policies (free download, free call among others) that perfectly hit the public interest.
As a result
, more and more people are likely to install these applications
in
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on
 their personal devices.
This
 drives the development of technology in general as the demand for using media increases.
Thirdly
, the use of social media reduces travel time as online users can totally work at
home which
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home, which
 helps avoid struggling to escape from
traffic jam
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the traffic jam
traffic jams
a traffic jam
.
This
 contributes to the increase in labour productivity.In terms of cons, the safety of online users is put at risk due to the vice of these
networks which
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networks, which
 allows everyone to create an account without identity verification. As a consequence, online users are bound to fall prey of phishing scammers.
Moreover
, when users communicate with strangers, they are likely to be trapped in privacy problems as their personal information may be spread out in social platforms.
This
leads
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has led
 to many devastating consequences
since
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for
 well-practiced deceivers are bound to take
advantages
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advantage
 of these leaking information to threaten or blackmail other users. All these not only cripple users’ personal
finance but
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finance, but
also
 leave them psychological traumas. More importantly, using media in a long time without traditional interaction, people are likely to become individualistic and narcissistic which causes the rupture between individual and society.
This
 may pose a
great
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greater
 threat
for
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to
 modern society as many people isolate themselves
instead
 of integrating into communities.In conclusion, it is undeniable that social media helps people reap better benefits.
However
, I still believe all disadvantages above eclipse its advantages.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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